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I Dream of Her

Screenplay
By
Hilda Vidal


FADE IN:

INT- JAKE’S APARTMENT- MORNING


[“Bling ... bling …time to bake the donuts”, blares JAKE’S alarm clock. JAKE, a 35-year-old man, did not want to get out of bed. He threw a shoe at his alarm clock. The Alarm clock fell and landed on the cat who lies sleeping in its mouse Shaped bed. Belly (the cat) raised his head and rolled his eyes at Jake. After rocking back and forth a couple of times on his bed Jake decided to get Up. He jumped up and shook his head. Jake slipped on his big bird slippers and got out of bed.]

JAKE
[to BELLY]

What are you looking at?

[The cat hissed at Jake while crawling towards JAKE'S bed]

[Jake clapped his sleepers against one another]

JAKE
There’s no place like home ... there's no place like home

[The cat stared at Jake and jumped into Jake’s bed. JAKE drags himself into the bathroom]

CUT TO

INT'JAKE'S APARTMENT- BATHROOM

[JAKE looks at his face in the mirror for one second]

JAKE
[sad]

God - another miserable day

[He looks down at the floor as he enters the shower]

JAKE
[shouts]

Belly ... Belly, could you please turn on the radio for me?


CUT TO

INT/JAKE'S APARTMENT- BEDROOM/MORNING

[Belly rolled his eyes then jumped down from the bed and crawled
towards the radio. Belly reached up to the radio and turned the knob, the radio turned on. Belly began wagging his tail to the beat of the song]

JAKE
[shouts]

Thanks Belly

CUT TO

INT/JAKE'S APARTMENT- BEDROOM/MORNING

[BELLY grins]

CUT TO

INT/JAKE'S APARTMENT- BATHROOM/MORNING

[Jake finishes showering. He grabs his Bob the builder shower and begins drying himself off. Jake turns to the mirror.]

JAKE
I’m hot…

[laughs]

CUT TO

INT/JAKE’S BEDROOM/MORNING

[Jake walks into his room dancing. BELLY wagged his tail to the beat of the song. Jake walks to his closet and reached for a knob next to his closet door and a horn sounded. The closet door slides open automatic after the horn sounds five times.]

CUT TO

INT/JAKE’S BEDROOM- CLOSET/MORNING

[All JAKE’S shoes shined. His dressy shirts are arranged
by color, size and year. Jake steps into his closet and few seconds later he is Dressed.]

CUT TO

INT/JAKE’S BEDROOM/MORNING

[He walks towards his bedroom mirror and looks at himself lifting his pants way past his belly button. He grabs his broken taped in the middle glasses and placesthem on his face]

JAKE
Oh gosh ... just when I thought I was getting hot

[Jake frowns and heads for radio and turns it off.]

[Belly covers his eyes with his paw]

JAKE
[Winks at Belly]

Time to bake the donuts, goodbye

[JAKE leaves]

CUT TO

EXT/JAKE’S DONUT SHOP/MORNING

[Outside the donut shop are two employees sitting down on the sidewalk drinking beer. There are two that stand near the door waiting for JAKE to open the shop.]

CUT TO

EXT/SIDEWALK- IN FRONT OF DONUT SHOP/MORNING

[JAKE is crossing the sidewalk when he got splashed with sewer water by a car that drives at a fast speed past him.]

JAKE
[sigh]

Just perfect…

[JAKE stops walking and wipes himself clean. One of the employees, ROSS who sits down drinking beer sees what had happened to Jake]

ROSS

Ha, ha, ha

[Jake walks towards the donut shop Cleaning off his glasses. Jake reached for his keys to open the shop.]

ROSS

Hey boss, someone thought you needed a shower this fine early morning

ROSS
[laughs]

JAKE

You know - you are not supposed to be drinking while on the job

ROSS

Oh this? This is my medicine.

[ROSS takes a big gulp of his beer then burps and wipes his mouth and throws the beer on the sidewalk as he stands up]

[JAKE nods his head up and down while opening the Donut shop]

TIM,Jim,MIKE
[laugh]

JAKE
[Opens the door]

Okay delinquents ... time to bake the donuts.

INT/DONUT SHOP- DINNINGROOM/MORNING

[Jake looks around as TIM,Jim,MIKE,ROSS enter the donut shop]

Aren't we missing someone?

MIKE
[smirks]

Yeah boss. They are out back doing the Lambada

JAKE

Great! You guys start your duties while I go separate those two
Animals

CUT TO

EXT/DONUT SHOP/MORNING

[He walks around the back of the shop and hears moaning. Jake takes a quick peak around the corner only to see STEPHANIE with her skirt up as Roland is behind her pulling on her hair.]

JAKE
[screams]

Holy Jesus!

[The two employees are startled. STEPHANIE turns around lowering her skirt. ROLAND pulls up his pant.]

[ROLAND walks Towards Jake buttoning his pants]

ROLAND
[grinning]

Have you never had sex? It's no big deal

JAKE
[Upset]

I am not paying you guys to make out! C'mon let's go to work

[JAKE, ROLAND and STEPHANIE walk towards the entrance of the shop. ROLAND places his arm around Jake and looks at STEPHANIE while she walks in front of them]

ROLAND
[Grins and hugs Jake really tight]

Wow boss - what an ass on that bitch

[JAKE fixes his broken glasses]

By the way boss ... you smell really bad!

INT/DONUT SHOP- DINNINGROOM/MORNING

JAKE
[To ROLAND,STEPHANIE,TIM,Jim,MIKE,ROSS]

Just get to work all of you.

[Walks into his office]

CUT TO

INT/DONUT SHOP- KITCHEN/MORNING

[STEPHANIE and ROLAND are in the corner kissing. TIM
is picking his nose kneading dough. Mike was sneezing everywhere.

CUT TO

INT/DONUT SHOP- DINNINGROOM/MORNING

[Jim cleaning the tables, moping and looking under the tables for bugs. ROSS Sits down drinking a beer he had smuggled into the shop]

JAKE
[yells from office]

Are you guys ready for me to open the shop?

ROSS
[yells]

Yeah!

ROLAND
[yells from kitchen]

Oh man! Why did you say yes? You idiot

ROSS
[laughs and shouts]

Sorry dude

[ROSS takes the beer and hides it inside his
Pant pocket. ROSS stands and runs to the counter and began whipping it down]

[JAKE leaves the office and walks pass Jim to flip the sign.]

JAKE
[Smiling]

Nice job Jim. I believe you are getting better at cleaning

Jim

Thanx boss. Maybe if I keep it up they'll let me off probation

[Jake gets closer to Jim on his way to the front of the shop.]

JAKE

You know...if you keep up the good work - I might just give your probation officer the okay to let you off

[Jim smiles back at JAKE who turns the sign to open.]

Jim

You know boss if you do that - I might not want to work for you for free

[Grins]


JAKE

Very funny

[JAKE walks towards the kitchen, when all of a sudden an older man taps on the glass window of the shop and waves hello to him. JAKE walks back to the door and lets him inside]

JAKE

Good morning Charles

[Grins as the man enters]

CHARLES

Good morning Jake

JAKE

Hi sir, how are you doing this lovely morning?

[Jake is at the door making sure that the
door is unlocked. Jake sees beer cans on the sidewalk]

JAKE

[whispers]

Someone shoot me

[Jake steps outside to pick up the beer cans lying around in front of his store]

[Charles sits down and stares at Jim as he cleans the tables.
STEPAHNIE walks out of the kitchen and heads towards Charles]

STEPHANIE
[Chewing her bubble gum obnoxiously]

What can I do for you?

CHARLES
[With a grin]

The same as usual


STEPHANIE
[laughs]

Sure! One coffee - coming up

[STEPHANIE walks behind the counter and pours coffee in the cup. She bends down and picks at her ears then she rubs what's stuck on her finger inside the cup]

[to herself]

I hope you like it ... I made it with love

[laughs]

[She hands Charles the coffee]

Hope you enjoy it

CHARLES
[with hald a grin]

Thanx I hope so

[STEPHANIE walks to the counter]

[JAKE walks into the donut shop and hears a noise, he turns around and sees someone throw another beer can in front of his shop]

JAKE
[In disgust]

Oh brother, I give up...


[CHARLES takes a sip of his coffee. JAKE is passing by CHARLES when from nowhere CHARLES spits up the coffee]

JAKE

Are you okay?

CHARLES

This coffee tastes like dirt!

JAKE

[Grabs the coffee cup and stares at STEPHANIE]

I am sorry about that ... I'll grab you another cup

[STEPHANIE flicks her hair and with arms crossed she leaves to the kitchen.]

Jim

Uh oh - someone is in deep shit

[Laughs]

JAKE
[Exclaims to Jim]

Could you please do your work in silence?

[JAKE walks with the cup of coffee behind the counter and looks at the coffee maker it was covered with mold]

JAKE
[upset]

That’s just gross

[JAKE takes the whole pot of coffee to the kitchen]

CUT TO

INT/DONUT SHOP- KITCHEN/MORNING

JAKE

[JAKE taps his foot holding out the coffee pot]

------If anyone knows of someone in need of a FANTASY screenplay, please let me know. Thank you.


.. :D
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:? What happened to the one I edited? This is starting to suck.

Anyways creative thread calls for some creation...

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If I am not being wanted here, just let me know... am getting that feeling- :?
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Okay, I saw what happened. My bad.
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i just got rid of the duplicate........it had my name on the post anyway so i deleted it.......no point in having two identical posts ........ :D ..........don't panic, no-one is messing with your stuff Lammy......... :D
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fluffy wrote:i just got rid of the duplicate........it had my name on the post anyway so i deleted it.......no point in having two identical posts ........ :D ..........don't panic, no-one is messing with your stuff Lammy......... :D
Yes, I noticed that. Sorry noticed a bit too late- :lol: Thanx.
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no probs, i was just trying to help :wink: :D
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fluffy wrote:no probs, i was just trying to help :wink: :D
I recommend everyone to help with whatever they can.. this world would be a better place. Thanx again.
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Okay, Who was the genius to not have been paying attention to their job duties?

[JAKE slowly looks askance around at his employees.

ROSS
[smiles]

That was Stephanie

STEPHANIE
[shouts]

You jerk!

[STEPHANIE punches ROSS in the arm]

ROSS

Ouch

JAKE

Okay… never mind

[JAKE drops the pot in the sink and takes a clean pot]

Man ... when will I get good help around here? These delinquents
Should all be beheaded

[Laughs towards the kitchen door]

ROLAND

What was that boss?

[grins]

JAKE
[turns around]

Nothing, just will you all get to work

[JAKE walks out the kitchen]

STEPHANIE

You are an idiot ROSS

ROSS
[laughing]

Yeah, whatever…

[ROLAND walks to ROSS]

ROLAND
[demanding]

Leave my girl alone or I’ll cut your tongue

[laughs]
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I'm not posting any more of it. It was just proof that I wrote it. :D Anyways almost done and I hope someone takes if off my hands so bad. :? Anyone know of a person looking for a fantasy script? I'm trying to also sell it on myspace but no one is responding... gosh this writing movies and the lack of attention is starting to suck. What do I have to do to get some ATTENTION? FLUFFY, suggestions? I'm serious! :D
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(sorry I had posted this before but edited some stuff) I was not going to post any more of the script but I couldn't help it- :D Pages 12 through 15 of 200+ pages.

CUT TO

INT/DONUT SHOP- DINNING ROOM/MORNING

JAKE
[shouts from behind the counter]

The coffee will be just two
minutes - would you like a donut on the house while you wait on the coffee ?

CHARLES
[smiles]

Sure

[CHARLES looks at Jim as Jim is cleaning of the tables]

JAKE
[Shouts to his employees in the kitchen]

Can someone please hand me a fresh donut?

CUT TO

INT/DONUT SHOP- KITCHEN/ MORNING

[ROLAND, STEPHANIE, MIKE, TIM, ROSS all look at each other]

TIM

Oh wait… I'll make him a very tasty one

[TIM grabs a donut from the donut tray and dragged it all over the floor]

MIKE
[disgusted]

Dude… there are like dead roaches there

TIM
[laughs]

Yes, I am sure he'll love this one

[Laughs again]

ROLAND
[Grins]

Here, toss it my way

[TIM threw the donut to ROLAND, ROLAND Catches it and leaves the kitchen]

CUT TO

INT/DONUT SHOP- DINNING ROOM/MORNING

ROLAND
[grins]

[Hands JAKE the donut]

Here boss

[JAKE grabs a napkin and places the donut in it]

JAKE

Thanx Roland

[ROLAND goes in the kitchen]

CUT TO

INT/DONUT SHOP- KITCHEN/ MORNING

[ROLAND, STEPHANIE, ROSS, MIKE, TIM peak throw a hole in the kitchen door]

CUT TO

INT/DONUT SHOP- DINNING ROOM/MORNING

[JAKE walks with donut in hand to CHARLES]

JAKE

Again ... I am so sorry for the inconvenience.

[JAKE hands CHARLES the donut]

CHARLES

[grabs the donut, takes a bite]

Mmmm ... never had such a good tasting chocolate chip donut before

[Grins]

CUT TO

INT/DONUT SHOP- KITCHEN/MORNING

[ROLAND, STEPHANIE, ROSS, TIM, MIKE laugh]

CUT TO

INT/DONUT SHOP- DINNINGROOM/ MORNING

JAKE
[nods head side to side, to himself]

Huh, Since when do we have chocolate chip donuts? s

[JAKE stares at the kitchen door]

[confused]

Well - I am glad you like it

[JAKE Groans as he walks towards the kitchen]

CUT TO

INT/DONUT SHOP- KITCHEN/ MORNING

STEPHANIE

[To ROLAND, ROSS, TIM, MIKE]

Yuk! That old man sure is desperate

[ROLAND, ROSS, MIKE, TIM all laugh]

ROSS
[Whispers]

Oh crap, here comes boss
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:cry: I'm so sad and frustrated... seems like I have a better chance at selling my ass than to get this screenplay noticed.. I am SOO disillusioned with the whole entertainment business... :? :cry: and I am ready to just give up on this dream... :?
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It may need to be edited a bit agian, but- lol, I don't mind. :D


CUT TO

INT/MCDONALDS- DINNING ROOM/AFTERNOON

[STEPHANIE, ROLAND, ROSS, MIKE AND TIM are sitting and eating at McDonalds.]

[STEPHANIE is dialing SUSAN’S number from her cell phone]

CUT TO

INT/JOHN’S PLUMBING COMPANY- DESK/AFTERNOON

[SUSAN is sitting down at desk writing on paper]

[Phone rings]

SUSAN
[picks up phone]

Hello! John's plumbing. How may I help you?

FROM THE OTHER END
STEPHANIE

Hey Susan, it's me Stephanie. I was just wondering what you are
Doing tonight?

SUSAN
[leans back on arm chair,rolls eyes, disgusted]

For what? So you can hook me up with a total loser like the last guy?

CUT TO

INT/MCDONALDS- DINNING ROOM/AFTERNOON

STEPHANIE
[closes an eye and wrinkles her face]

No! I promise this time will be different

FROM THE OTHER END
SUSAN

[laughs]

If you lie to me - you will be the one cleaning toilets ...and unclogging pipes!

STEPHANIE
[looks at ROLAND, ROSS, TIM, MIKE, grins]

Trust me Susan this guy is hot ... in fact, I would date him in a heart beat

[ROSS and TIM laugh]

STEPHANIE
[puts phone on chest, patting ROLAND on the back, scared]

Are you okay sweetie?

ROLAND
[leans forwards, coughs]

I am okay

[holds throat, coughing]

I’m…

[coughs, grabs a glass full of water]

STEPHANIE
[puts her cell phone back to her ear, crosses fingers from left hand, closes eyes]

So will you go? Please - For me Susan
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----(So I ERASED the YEAR this took place in...)---
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